Our school runs on a code, the Pupil Code; a code that no one follows, because nobody is quite sure what the code is.
This shouldn’t matter to you, teachers, as we all know that the code of conduct is full of lies intended to misguide and trick pupils into misbehaving. We have been mislead to believe that our own school council wrote this, but really, we all know that the teachers were behind this.
Unfortunately the people who judge our school are blind and do not see that the school is a death trap that nearly every body tries to avoid.
There are few good things about our school. Lunch is best enjoyed when outside of a 10 mile radius of the school.
Also we all look forward to going to school when we know the summer holiday is the next day.
The school looks pretty clean, when compared to Slumdog Millionaire.
March 10, 2015 at 4:15 pm
You are beginning to show more sophistication in your sentence phrases and you are clearly using subordinate clauses to set up the punchlines in your satire. Your ideas are coming together well, but you should take some more care in planning them.
Targets:
1) Write this as a student persuading teachers to allow students to misbehave
2) What about this full stops?
3) Develop ideas into paragraphs.